Score: 8

"This is great."

submission: Windows Doors

date: September 24, 2009

After following the thread in the Flash forum, I knew this would amount to something great.

Overall, there is little advice I can offer you. You are clearly a great coder and deserve more than just a Daily 3rd for this.

Score: 7

"Not bad."

submission: GadSnakePath

date: March 2, 2009

The programming you put into it was excellent, but there were a few simple things you could do to make it better. It wouldn't take much longer to improve the graphics, add sound, or even add an editor that allows you to place blocks or something to create a maze for the snake, or something similar.

Overall, it was good, but could have been better.

Score: 8

"Relevant to my interests."

submission: The n00b Collab

date: February 21, 2009

It would have been better if you made my alt a co-author.

Minus 12 points for lack of me being co-author.
Plus 20 for me being in it.

Score: 7

"Not bad."

submission: Bedtime.

date: February 17, 2009

The animation was a little bit too shaky for my liking. You might want to try making smaller undulations in the lines. There wasn't a whole lot of movement, which is uncommon in most flash.

Somewhat unique. You could use some work on your FbF to make it just a bit less shaky. The shaky feel works for this, so don't try taking it away completely.

Score: 8

"Excellent."

submission: If Trees Could Speak

date: February 17, 2009

Though it could have used a bit more animation, I liked the style and overall feel of it. You might want to try adding pale colours to works like these, but only on key objects, to make them stand out. You also might want to clean up your lines a little bit.

I don't have much else to say. I liked the style; it was unique and had a nice feel to it.

Score: 5

"Needs work."

submission: Fridge Chasing Madness

date: February 16, 2009

The game was a whole lot of nothing. You basically had to hold down one key for most of the game, except for the odd jump here and there. You need to implement more action.

Also, you should work on the camera angle. The character took up most of the screen, making it difficult to see around it. The animation could use some improvement as well; the walking cycle needs improvement.

You can look here for improving your walking cycle: http://www.newgrounds.com/portal/view /67509

You might also try using perspective in the background. It was mostly like a 2-d painting all the way through it. The character often floated above the ground, as well. Overall, this wasn't too bad; the story was alright, and you put at least SOME effort into this.

Also note that this review is NOT abusive. The link is both relevant to the review and inside Newgrounds.

Score: 4

"Not bad."

submission: Hypercube

date: February 16, 2009

I hope you put a lot of effort into the AS. It's not really anything special, and next time you might want to work towards something a little more complicated, like cycling colours, different shapes, and possibly work towards a kaleidoscope feel to a video.

Score: 7

"Decent."

submission: Run Elephant Run

date: February 16, 2009

The gameplay itself was rather generic; it's really just a typical avoid/sidescroller game. However, the graphics were excellent, the story was touching, and it was surprisingly fun.

Overall, you should definitely work on your story. I understand this didn't take you that long, but you should still put a little bit more time if some part of it seems incomplete.

Score: 9

"Satisfying."

submission: There She Is!! final step

date: February 16, 2009

It combined the right amount of all of the previous entries in the series. It had the right amount of story, like in the first 3, and just enough of the message from #4.

Overall, your animation is seamless, but your story can use some work. I know this portrays a powerful message about interracial/alternate relationships, but you can't rely on doing that if you want to create something big.

Score: 8

"That was great."

submission: Snowbot

date: December 31, 2008

Your animation skills are obviously very good. The only part I disliked about this was the fire, it just didn't look realistic enough.

Overall, it was a great animation, and I liked the song. I would just suggest that you try to put some effort into the story, or make the music sync with the vicinity (ie. stars flashing with the music, clouds bouncing, etc).